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AngeloftheNight wrote:

Alright sounds good.

EDIT: Here's my first ever 4E attempt at a monster. I created one of the Fast Zombies that Vymrl made during the Humite Wars.

Behold, and let the criticism flow! lol

Fast Zombie

Level 1 x [Skirmisher]
Medium Natural Animate (Undead)
A fiendish howl echoes through the tunnels, and the oozing corpse leaps towards you...
Initiative: +4 x ; Senses: Tremorsense 3
HP: 14 x ; Bloodied: 7
AC: 15 x ; Fortitude: 16; Reflex: 15; Will: 13
Resist [Necrotic] 10 x ; Immune [Disease, Poison]; Vulnerable [Radiant] 5
Str: +3 x (16), Con: -1 (8), Dex: +2 (15), Int: -3 (3), Wis: +1 (10), Cha: -3 (3)
Action Points:1
Speed 6 x ; Climb 7


"This is my base stat block" Show

M Slam (Standard; at-will)
Reach 2; +6 vs AC; 1d12+4 damage and the Target is marked until the end of the Abomination's next turn.
m Buffet of Gore (Standard; at-will)
The Abomination makes two Slam attacks.
m Ensareing Entrails (Minor; at-will)
+5 vs Reflex; The Target is grabbed (until escape). The Abomination may only grab one creature at a time.
m Visceral Envelopment (Minor; at-will)
Grabbed target only; +4 vs Fortitude; 1d10+3 damage. On a hit make a secondary attack against the same target.
Secondary Attack:+4 vs Fortitude; The Target contracts Filth Fever (MM 211)
r Fling (Standard; at-will)
Grabbed Target only; Ranged 5; 1d6+3 damage and the target is slid up to five squares (place adjacent to secondary target) and knocked prone.
Secondary attack: Target is thrown into secondary target; +5 vs Refelx; 1d6+3 damage and the secondary target is knocked prone.
Reanimate (The first time the Abomination drops to 0 Hit Points)
Make a new initiative check for the Abomination. On its next turn, the Abomination rises (as a move action) with 105 Hit Points.
Alignment: Evil
Languages:--

Good attempt- down to business-

Senses: Perception -4; Darkvision (Disregard Tremorsense)
INT -4 (3); WIS +0 (10); CHA -4 (3)
No Action Points, since it is not an Elite or Solo Skirmisher

Slam Attack: 1d6+3 or 1d10+3 damage, and the target is weakened (save ends).
Ensnaring Entrails: +4 vs. Reflex
Fling: Range- 2 or 3; +4 vs Fortitude; Target is thrown 2- 3 squares into the air, and lands prone; Miss- Half damage, and target is thrown 1 square and is not knocked prone. Disregard secondary attack.
Reanimate: Rises with 14 HP
Alignment: Unaligned

This was in fact a good attemp, but there were a few hitches that I have found. Having the Monster Manual may be helpful for constructing a Homebrewed monster (I have created quite a lot of homebrewed monsters), and to improve existing monsters to make them fit your campaign more easily.

Keep it up.

I'm sort of having a problem with designing Iyelle. I want to give her a nice variety of powers, but once I add in the powers from the vampire template, it just seems like she has way too many abilities. I wonder if it will be a big deal if I cut of Dominating Gaze, Mist Form, and Second Wind.

Then again, I'm not sure if vampires in this game are different than the template in the DMG.

I just think it's odd that they gave vampires both blood drain and second wind. It makes vampire fights last too long...

Actually the template doesn't give second wind. It just appears on the MM vampires.

Iyelle Level 16 Elite Controller (Leader)

Medium natural humanoid (undead) XP 2 x ,800
Initiative +10 x Senses Perception +15; Darkvision
HP 308 x ; Bloodied 154
AC 30 x ; Fortitude 27; Reflex 28; Will 33
Resist 10 x Necrotic; Vulnerable 10 Radiant
Speed 6
Quarterstaff (standard; at-will) • x ; Weapon
+22 x vs. AC; 1d6 + 4 damage.
Shadowflame Bolt (standard; at-will) • x ; Fire, Necrotic
Ranged 10 x ; +20 vs. Reflex; 2d8 + 7 fire and necrotic damage, and the target takes a -2 penalty to fortitude and will defenses (save ends)
Horrors Below (minor; recharge 6 x ) • Teleportation
Iyelle summons 4 x Flesh Puppets in squares adjacent to her. Their initiative is directly after hers.
Soul Storm (standard; encounter) • x ; Necrotic, Healing, Zone
Close Burst 3 x ; +21 vs. Will; 4d8 +7 necrotic damage, and all undead in the area (not including Iyelle) feed on the souls, recovering 15 hp, and receiving a +2 bonus to all attack rolls and defenses until the end of the encounter.
Blood Drain (standard; recharges when adjacent creature becomes bloodied) • x ; Healing
Requires combat advantage against the target; +20 x vs. fortitude; 2d12 + 7 damage, and the target is weakened (save ends), and Iyelle regains 77 hit points.
Alignment: Evil
Skills Endurance +14 x , Heal +17, History +18, Insight +20, Religion +18
Str 18 x (+12) Dex 15 (+10) Wis 24 (+15)
Con 18 x (+12) Int 20 (+13) Cha 21 (+13)


Reasons for cutting Dominating Gaze: Iyelle is exerting too much energy controlling the undead in Old Terena to control any more creatures.
Mist Form: Iyelle refuses to flee. She doesn't accept failure, especially not her own.

History Checks (humites receive a +2 bonus on these checks)

DC 25: The garb that this humite is wearing is ceremonial elder clothes, worn by humite elders from long ago.
DC 30 (only after hearing her name): Iyelle Whiteplain was an elder of Rathali, the first humite settlement. It came to a mysterious demise that resulted in many citizens fleeing. Iyelle did not escape.

Arcana DC 20 reveals that she is a vampire.

So... thoughts on her? Too weak or powerful?

My only suggestion is not to give level one enemies so many powers.

Also, wizards almost always have 8 STR, not 8 CN.