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2 years ago ::
Nov 12, 2011 - 5:43AM
#61
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I like Confederacy Reborn. It flows off the tongue.
Garrett
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2 years ago ::
Nov 12, 2011 - 12:10PM
#62
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As you might have guessed, I think Reborn Confederacy sounds better, but if the majority of you like Confederacy Reborn better, I have no qualms. As for its full name, I was guessing something like "Reborn Confederacy of Affiliated Systems" or "Reborn Confederacy of Independent Systems".
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2 years ago ::
Nov 12, 2011 - 2:10PM
#63
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Jan 11, 2007
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Hey guys,
Reborn Confederacy (or Confederacy Reborn? which sounds better?) will do for now. Good work FR. May have to put a little bit on the end, 'Reborn Confederacy of...' ?
Prom. Send me all of the edits, and I'll pick. I may have to mush multiple efforts together. I will do my best to stay faithful to the cause. If you're still not happy, we can use your 'ace' if you wish. I am glad to have a safe pair of hands to work with, prom...without your efforts, this project would not, could not work...thanks
Otherwise, I will conceed that the outline may have to be rewritten completley. However, anyone who does has to read the entire campagin and know it enough to get the job done to an acceptable level, at best back to front. No exceptions. They have to know the work. I can also help out here.
Cool. Crawling becomes walking, and soon we shall all run faster than the wind.
Thanks guys,
Matty out (for now)
The edit work just needs to be mashed together, because most people found different errors, or sentence structure problems. There is no need to rewrite the outline. I'll send them soon.
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2 years ago ::
Nov 12, 2011 - 5:38PM
#64
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Jun 30, 2008
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Hey guys,
I agree with both Garrett and FR. How bout 'The Afilliated Confederate Reborn'? Prob grammar issues, anyone? They have to (at least seem) to be united enough to intimidate and get the job done. The 'reborn' suggests more...cool.
Cool prom, I'll try and get it to work as best I can.
Talk soon
Matty
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2 years ago ::
Nov 13, 2011 - 4:21PM
#65
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Date Joined:
Jan 11, 2007
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Hey guys,
I agree with both Garrett and FR. How bout 'The Afilliated Confederate Reborn'? Prob grammar issues, anyone? They have to (at least seem) to be united enough to intimidate and get the job done. The 'reborn' suggests more...cool.
Cool prom, I'll try and get it to work as best I can.
Talk soon
Matty
I've sent you all five edits of the outline. I expect that a few more might come through, but I see no rush on this. I'm more interested in getting the first episode ready for the project team. I have a friend who works at the New Zealand Herald (newspaper) who can clean the outline up, once it is a bit more polished.
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2 years ago ::
Nov 13, 2011 - 7:28PM
#66
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Hey guys,
Awesome!
Thanks for your help prom
Matty
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2 years ago ::
Nov 13, 2011 - 9:12PM
#67
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Regarding the legacy canon issue, sure Cade could havewalked away what's stopping his son or his son's son etc. From having any contact with Lukes ghost? Unless Cade puts a moratorium on his family and each son is a loyal and not curious about the force at all for nearly 800 years or so. So it stands to reason one curious Skywalker there in that expansive time got his hands on a holo cron or started having words with Luke.
I also just wanted to let you guys know that my wife and I appreciate being involved and would like to continue being involved if you'll have us. She really wants to playtest this for our local group that just got back together.
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2 years ago ::
Nov 14, 2011 - 11:37AM
#68
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Jan 11, 2007
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Regarding the legacy canon issue, sure Cade could havewalked away what's stopping his son or his son's son etc. From having any contact with Lukes ghost? Unless Cade puts a moratorium on his family and each son is a loyal and not curious about the force at all for nearly 800 years or so. So it stands to reason one curious Skywalker there in that expansive time got his hands on a holo cron or started having words with Luke. I also just wanted to let you guys know that my wife and I appreciate being involved and would like to continue being involved if you'll have us. She really wants to playtest this for our local group that just got back together.
I'm glad to hear it, as episode one is much longer than the outline, and we will need a lot more people. We should have a copy of episode one, "The Princess's Pride" ready by the end of the month.
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2 years ago ::
Nov 14, 2011 - 6:42PM
#69
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Jun 30, 2008
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Regarding the legacy canon issue, sure Cade could havewalked away what's stopping his son or his son's son etc. From having any contact with Lukes ghost? Unless Cade puts a moratorium on his family and each son is a loyal and not curious about the force at all for nearly 800 years or so. So it stands to reason one curious Skywalker there in that expansive time got his hands on a holo cron or started having words with Luke. I also just wanted to let you guys know that my wife and I appreciate being involved and would like to continue being involved if you'll have us. She really wants to playtest this for our local group that just got back together.
Hey guys,
You are right DS. I'm sure there is an awesome (and poinient) story that eventually brings the Skywalker line back to the Jedi Order just waiting to be told. It might even make a cool campaign. Right now I'm just pressuming it happens in a proper and timely fasion. This is another thing that must at least be mentioned in the campaign guide.
I am more than welcome for you to sit at the table. In fact, prom's inclusion of you in the team originally is, to me, an endorsement of your value and the skills and experiences you can bring to this project. I am also willing to wager that prom has faith in your loyalty (to both the team and this cause). This means that I do too (and you're efforts here prove this as well). Overall, I am glad you see something in this project, and I hope it brings many joyful and exciting moments to SW gaming fans everywhere.
Thanks for all of your help,
Matty
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2 years ago ::
Nov 14, 2011 - 9:14PM
#70
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I finally got a chance to print it out and go over it. I'm going to admit I don't have Word on my computer so the doc file was a little hard to follow but I did manage to get a printout of the four pages. I'll start by pointing out a few typoes/possible grammatical errors. All of these are on the first real page of text:
1. In the last sentence under APP I believe it should be "heart felt" instead of "heartfelt" and it should be "starship" instead of "Star-ship" a little after that. PS. Earlier in that paragraph mountainside should probably be mountain side (two words) as well.
2. About six lines up from the bottom of the first colomn shouldn't it be "he realized" instead of "he realised?"
2.5. Column2, paragraph4. "If the heroes are slow the boarders, Black Sun assassins, attack them." I'd cut either "the boarder" or "Black Sun assassins" from the line as they describe the same group but I believe that comma I added should be in there otherwise.
3. Under TAW in the second to last sentence of the first paragraph it should read "her leads have hit a dead ends." Leads are plural so the need multiple ends.
4. In the last sentence (which is already highlighted) it should probably say "When defeated the champion tells the PCs what he knows about the assassin."
That's what I have for now although I'm realizing there are a lot of places things could cleaned up, simplified, or even cut without changing any meanings.
When it comes to the story I wonder if there will be too many "gotcha" moments. Although multiple routes to certain actions happening can be written I sometimes worry that too many thing must happen.
Although they may come somewhere else I believe the campaign guideline should also mention the "rules" for PC creation and say what books will be required. I'll assume all the books are on the table, which is one benefit of working with a "complete" game system, but for simplicity it is often helpful to keep sources confined to few books. I also mention PC creation rules because I would assume PB 28 for stats, fixed hit points, and effective but not extremely optimized or min/maxed character.
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