Ajani Goldmane apparently held his own against Nicol Bolas, Planeswalker and came out Ajani Vengeant .
Let's see how things work out for Gideon Jura .
Criteria = Design a second Gideon Jura planeswalker card. And include a brief [[500 work limit]] story to help explain your design and detail what happens when Gideon takes on the Dragon.
Time = At least 24 hours, at most 93 hours.
EDIT = k; i got the timeline wrong -- still; design and write
Planeswalker - Gideon
As every child grows up, he is told the tales of heroes. How great persons achieve great things, how good always prevails.
What happens then, when your champion never returns? Do you live in the comfort of your ignorance, keeping the flames of hope ever burning? Do you question his task and soul, knowing that evil would never prevail?
What do you tell yourself each day, and what will you tell your children?
Also, just fyi, Ajani Vengeant is earlier in the timeline than Goldmane is.
I'll write the background story:
During a passionate tryst with Chandra, she accidentally incinerates him. Fortunately, there's a tribe of sherpa who live atop the alabaster peaks of the plane of Koridia, who specialize in healing and rejuvenation magics. She takes his charred corpse up to them, hoping to revive her lost lover. Then, it's revealed that the elder of the sherpa tribe is in fact a shapeshifting Nicol Bolas, who devours them for their delicious sparks. Then Jace shows up because he's blue and he wears a hoodie, thus making him 328% more relateable than any other character to the target audience, which dictates that he must appear in every single storyline. "How could you, Bolas, they were my good friends!" "They weren't that good, in retrospect I wish I'd put some ketchup on them or something." Then, the new popularity polls come in, and Gideon is saved. He hacks his way out of Bolas' gullet with his sura, and he and Chandra run like ****. This drives Sarkhan into ever deeper insanity, and he begins a career as a serial killer of little children. Then, Nicol Bolas reveals that this was his plan all along, begins cackling maniacally, and punches Tezzeret for no good reason.
Meanwhile, in an abandoned corner of Ravnica, Garruk meets the charming Ral Zarek. Moppi dies of a nosebleed.
Planeswalker - Gideon (MR)
+1: Until your next turn, creatures cannot attack ~ and he cannot be the target of spells or abilities.
-2: Destroy target tapped creature.
-7: Destroy all creatures. They cannot be regenerated.
Starting Loyalty: 4
Flavor text (just pretend there's room for it):
Gideon was not strong enough to save anyone else from Bolas' assault. It is still uncertain whether he was strong enough to save himself.
Gideon, the Enslaved
+0: Put a loyalty counter on target Planeswalker.
-3: Search your library for a Planeswalker card, reveal that card, and put it into your hand. Shuffle your library afterwards.
-6: Put X loyalty counters on target Planeswalker, where X is 6 plus the number of loyalty counters on Gideon, the Enslaved.
Want me to just leave it at "doesn't end well?"
Nobody's going to pretend that Gideon has a chance? I mean I don't see him killing Bolas but maybe he could just escape more or less unharmed (for the moment). Or what about a Gideon card where he's prepped for battle with the dragon?
We already lost Venser, let one of the bad guys die for a change.
Doesn't Gideon use Platinum Angel sometimes? I thought I saw it in one of those short 'animated' Wizards ads.
Planeswalker - Gideon, Liliana, Tezzeret, Sarkhan
+2: ~ deals three damage to target creature, player or planeswalker. You gain three life.
+1: Target player sacrifices a creature. Put a 3/3 green beast creature token onto the battlefield.
-1: Target player discards a card. You draw a card.
-7: You gain an emblem with "Permanents you control are indestructible".
Because fighting Bolas on your own would be stupid.
I never broke any rule either. This is a planeswalker card with the Gideon subtype.
EDIT- Now with 500% more story!!!
He'd searched for so long for a way to escape the dragon, to one day bring him to justice. He'd searched and searched, but had found nothing, no soulution to his problem. Gideon was at a loss when the man came to him.
The man had long, braided hair and an arm made of metal latticework. The man offered solutions, solutions to his dragon problem. The man spoke at length of how Gideon could fight back against his pursuer. He listened as the man with the metal arm explained to him how they could kill Nicol Bolas.
"You're the last person I need to complete this puzzle. I've found a number of people in situations... similar to yours Gideon, people who have reason to take arms against Bolas. I think together we can take down the dragon, make him pay for what he's done for us"
Gideon flinched involuntarily as Chandra came to mind. Oh gods, Chandra...
"I'll take it that you'll join me in this endeavour then? Good. Now my plan's really quite simple..."
Gideon couldn't help but think there was something suspicous about the man's smile. He didn't care. This man offered a chance to get back at the dragon and he would ally with the demons of the foulest pit to bring his retribution down on Bolas. I'll avenge you Chandra, finally I can avenge you. Finally the dragon will die.
Hopng thats > 500 words.
Gideon, Stained with Cowardice -
Planeswalker - Gideon
+1: Until end of turn, whenever a source deals damage to an opponent, it deals double that damage instead.
+1: Up to two target creatures each get +2/+0 until end of turn. They can't block this turn.
-4: Until end of turn, Gideon Jura becomes a 9/1 Human Soldier creature with trample that's still a planeswalker.
Unlike some forum goers, I'm a big fan of Gideon. I'd expect him to fail taking Bolas on one on one, but hopefully come back and git-r-done with friends.
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Walking in the dark, followed by the Devil Show
Gideon is a powerful planeswalker, this much could never be truthfully denied of the man; but every man has their limits. And there is always a force out there that can overshadow and blacken out the grandeur of even the mightiest suns. Nicol Bolas would be that eclipsing force to Gideon Jura. Among all the planeswalkers, it's still in question if there are any who can truly triumph over the monster. That legendary serpent which has laid waste to a legion of the most powerful entities in all history. An answer can be found, and it lies within the unknown; the esoteric veil of secrets, the darkest truths of reality, beyond the perception of the demigods. Within these shadows lurks dangers beyond our greatest fears. And yet, we're nothing but blind to the terrifying power whose palm were firmly clutched within.
Phenomenon. It's a term used to describe when the unreal takes form. An epiphany of the cosmic. Sometimes, an awe inspiring marvel. Sometimes, a rude awakening. For two unlucky planeswalkers, it would be a darkest mix of both, and even the grandeur of the devil himself, the great dread dragon, would be eclipsed by a force from beyond the shadows.
It all began while Gideon Jura is alone training near the top of Mt. Yínhuǒ, and suddenly, the sky blackens with a sickening quickness. Thick greyish clouds bubble and clot the sky. Soon, the sun is blackened out, and the temperature has dropped below 0. Gideon senses a strong presence, and the force binds him in place. He takes a firm stance to prepare himself for whatever might come. Then a ray of darkness beams down before him, like a negative ray of starlight. It forms a permeable haze, and from out the haze steps before him the fallen deity Xolotl. A dark lord of many things; of death, fire, and misfortune. And as the god of bad luck, Xolotl sought to craft both Gideon and Bolas' nightmares into a reality.
It was then that the dark lord questions Gideon of his knowing, then explain to Gideon who and what he is. Gideon is on edge, and prepared to fight to the death, but when he seeks to make a deft attack, finds himself frozen in place, as though trapped between a dream and reality. Next, Xolotl questions Gideon about Nicol Bolas, and tempts Gideon with the chance to destroy the devil serpent so that he may never be a threat to anyone forever after. Gideon says he would do almost anything. Of what he knows, there is of no greater evil in existence. It would be an ultimate justice to obliterate the beast. Xolotl replies to him only with a solemn "very well".
And so, Xolotl commands of Gideon two prerequisite conditions he must fulfill. First, he must bring the planeswalker Chandra Nalaar, and surrender her to him. She has been judged and must be executed for her crimes. Xolotl states that her power will be stripped from her and it will be used to empower Gideon, giving him the power he'll need to destroy Nicol Bolas. And lastly, he must bring her to Urborg, which is the only zone suitable for her execution and the empowering ritual. With the cracks of thunder echoing over the mountain range, the dark lord levitates backwards into the haze and vanishes.
After some time in contemplation, Gideon decides that this is what must be done. Although once her ally, he knows that her heart is as chaotic as her actions. She lived her life a selfish criminal, and as an envoy of heiromancy, Gideon feels it would be nothing less than a blessing for a divine justice to bring about an even greater divine justice. In three days time, Gideon finds the fierce pyromancer and coax her to follow him to the site of Yawgmoth's Tomb in Urborg.
Once they arrive, it takes only a moment for the same conditions to overshadow the already blackened skies of Urborg. Just as it happened on the mountain top, the two planeswalkers are frozen by the presence of the fallen deity. Xolotl steps out once again from the dark haze, and in an instance strikes Chandra down, piercing her through her heart. She gives out deep cry of agony, and the sound of her death strikes Gideon like lightning. His heart sinks as he beholds Chandra put to death, yet his distress would last only a moment. With an overwhelming force, Xolotl collapses the entire isle of Urborg, and his dark power fuses Chandra's spark and all her emotional chaos along with the all the dread power that lingered within Urborg. From this dark ritual, Gideon inherits the power of destructive force. And by this power, Gideon is changed forever; descended into the abyss of the Sephirot, into the darkest tiers of ascendancy.
As the saying goes, you must drive out evil with evil. That's basically the essence of the story here. Gideon inherits the force of destruction so that he may match the force that Nicol Bolas commands. As it stands, power is likely the only thing Nicol Bolas truly fears. He knows that the power of destruction is the only absolute power in existence. For this reason he hid himself away so that The Mending wouldn't destroy him. That's why the fear of power is logical. It's the force he himself commands. He knows its power, and therefore it must be the only thing he reveres. That's what makes this Gideon his worst nightmare, whose now a death knight. A killer of kings. A walking apocalypse.
But I wouldn't kill off Nicol Bolas so easy. He would survive and escape, taken a crushing blow to his pride. That's traditionally the way of the serpent, to slip through and slip away. From there, it would be a quest of redemption for the ego-broken dragon. As malicious as Nicol Bolas is, he'd definitely be seeking revenge, so he'd probably power-up and go for round II against Gideon.
As a design, the first ability represents his conception in the story. As do his three colors, each one representing a different element in the fusion (Himself white, Chandra red, Urborg black). He now draws power from the beyond and death, and that's where his second ability chimes in. It works well around exile operations (like Red Sun's Zenith or Path to Exile or Leyline of the Void ). The ultimate is symbolic of his destructive power. Gideon is still bound to heiromancy, but now much more strict of judgment. He will destroy even his allies at the faintest sign of ill will. The ability is opened up to all permanent types, utilizing the unique color combination. I made it universal (destroying permanents each player controls) to give him some edge, and make it really interesting.
And by the way, the ultimate ability doesn't work along the same likes as Decimate . If a player doesn't have one of the permanent types, it won't counter the entire ability. Any permanents they control of the chosen types will be destroyed and anything else will simply be passed over.
The wording of the ultimate suggests that you target permanents that have multiple controllers, that doesn't work..
No it doesn't, you're just misinterpreting the context.
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I'm not sure why I'm trying to make my card a legitimate submission, but I like it too much.
Gideon the Mindslave :2m
PW - Gideon
+1: You draw a card and lose 1 life.
-2: Sacrifice a creature, then gain life and draw cards equal to its power.
-XX: Target player sacrifices X creatures.
Backstory: Nicol Bolas is 50x as strong as Gideon Jura, there's not saiyanesque power increase that enable Gideon to decimate his evil foe, so Nicol Bolas just crushes his mind and turns him into a mindslave.
Seems like the general consensus is that Gideon is just not up to the task, and who am I to argue what the YMTC collective have decided upon?
Gideon, He Who Lost His Spark
Legendary Creature - Human
: Put a loyalty counter on ~.
"I... I swear I was a powerful Planeswalker! Why doesn't anyone listen to me? WHY IS EVERYONE LEAVING?!?"
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How does that help that person make a better design? You're just being sardonic.
onedayweek, as a strong rule of law, never overlap a planeswalker ability. Always do something different or in a different way. There are some exceptions to this rule already ( Ajani // Tamiyo // Sorin ). Even so, to make your content stand out you need originiality and dymanic essence. You'll get this from doing new things and working around special interactions.
I hope this helps.
Okay, here's a different version. I really wanted to play on the fact that Gideon is out trying to rally other planeswalkers against the Eldrazi. I figured he would do the same against Bolas.
Planeswalker - Gideon (M)
[+1] ~ deals 2 damage to target creature or player and you gain 2 life, then draw a card.
[-1] Gain control of target permanent until end of turn. Untap it and it gains haste until end of turn.
[-6] You gain an emblem with "Prevent all damage that would be dealt to creatures you control." and "Creatures you control get +X/+X, where X is the number of cards in the hand of the opponent with the most cards."
On Kephlai, I was a man bound to my laws. They gave me strength, they gave me a sense of pride, but they almost forced me to kill the woman I love. I hated it. The grief drove me away from my home and nearly took sanity. I sought repentance. I would make it right, I followed her.
On Zendikar I was too late to help her and she had already 'walked but I saw before me a people oppressed by ancient evil. I would fight for them, the odds were high but I would die trying. An honorable death I liked to think but I could even do that. I ran in the face of the inevitable, I was a coward.
I fled to the city-plane, Great Ravinica, hoping to find some truths behind whispers of a gathering of mighty Planewalkers. I thought if I could get their cooperation, we could push back the Eldrazi and erase my guilt of abandoning their victims. I searched for the Consortium but they were most elusive and I accidentally became embroiled in the conflict of the Guilds. I found peace of mind with the Boros where I could put my grief and sorrow in the back of my mind and just fight with their righteous anger that was so familiar. But it could not last, as I always knew it would have to end. The mad dragon of the this plane, Niv Mizzet, set about a cunning plan to seize control of the whole of Ravnica and he had to be stopped. Once again though, the man I was did not suffice for the job. I blundered about with my close-minded way and realized to achieve anything here for the people who needed my help I would have to expand my mind and attempt to out-think the Izzet scheme.
I wasn't alone though. I found the great mind-mage Jace Beleren, the rival of my fiery Queen and also to my surprise the leader of the Consotium, a great ally indeed. Our battles where fierce and fraught with peril and the Niv's plan came near to fruition and began to nearly tear the plane asunder but we and our coalition of Guilds and 'walkers achieved victory. I learned from him that for a man to be truly strong he must know himself, his very weakness so that he can turn them to strengths.
I was Proud, I was Reckless, I was Stupid, I was Weak. Now I am Strong.
I substitute your Dragon with a more likely one.
Alright, I just finished a brush up on my entry. Just on the story, fixing little qwerks.
As some additional information, legend regards Xolotl as a psychopomp, which are like spirit guides of sorts. I worked that into his role here. He's part otherworldly guide, part devil in disguise. As a Magic character, Xolotl has other roots being the black-green planeswalker from Bloodlines of the Orient. Within Bloodlines, he's mainly a neutral character seeking to claim the soul of the black-green legendary creature Fu-Ming, who was turned into a Phyrexian sort of speak.
Fu-Ming is part lich, part machine. He's gruesomely disfigured in a dark ritual and fused with a artifice that supports his lifeforce. It's indestructible and inseparable. In becoming an abomination, Fu-Ming curses his own existence, but can't be killed by conventional means (being he's a lich). So he radiates misery, evil, and hatred. He turns an entire province into the "Outlands" (a jungle waste). From there, he rules over the Outlands and captures entities to zombify, and enslave them to share in his disfigured tortured existence. Over time, the negativity building up within the Outlands overflows and Xolotl sends himself to claim Fu-Ming's powerful evil soul and clear the Outlands. That's to explain Xolotl's green-black representation within Bloodlines. Being he's also a god of fire, I have another character profile, Xolotl Unleashed (black // green // red) showing his full persona. If you didn't catch it, Xolotl is a fallen deity (like Lilith from Bloodlines). He's a force even greater than Nicol Bolas. A force of such density, it would overshadow and blacken out Nicol Bolas (as seen in Cruel Ultimatum ).
As for killing Chandra off, I feel it had to be done. Wizards can't seem to make a halfway decent planeswalker card out of her anyways, so might as well clip two birds with one stone. Now they don't have to worry about it, and her death serves as a very dynamic excerpt to the story. The part where she's executed right before Gideon is emotional even for me, and I'm who wrote it Gideon himself gets way more than he bargained for, being changed forever and now cursed with the emotional chaos that once haunted Chandra. She herself actually receives a blessing of sorts, being freed from that emotional chaos and laid to rest. Quite the twist being how it comes off as though in being executed that she's suffering the ultimate punishment. This all relates back to a theory of mine on existence, and a life worth living. If living becomes misery, then it's not a life worth living. Living is all based on pleasure and luxury. Living a life of emotional chaos is a tortured existence, and so being freed from it is like a blessing because her suffering is ended. Whereas if she had been left to live, all she had to look forward to was more pain and emotional chaos.
Gideon is hungry for heaven, but in order make that a reality, he must first drive out hell with hell. He must walk through the fire and emerge from out the otherside. The passage through fire is full of scalding pain and torment, it's a legendary vigil; and his new form represents this.
Gideon, Boros General
Planeswalker -- Gideon
[+2]: Two target creatures get double strike until the end of the turn.
[-3]: You get an emblem with "Whenever a creature enters the battlefield under your opponents, choose one: Deal one damage to that player or gain one life.
[-9]: Exile all lands target player controls. ~ deals X damage to target player and each creature he or she controls, where X is the number of lands exiled.
Story time is now
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The ground shook as another building in the Azorious section fell with a loud and resounding crash! Isperia, laying in her throne room with her advisors, her wings crooked and burnt, was breathing heacy. "This foe...is unlike anything I've seen...he's evil, is all I can tell, and not from here. I think he may be like...one of them..."Word count: 411. Also, If I screwed up on flavor as far as what things are called...DON'T CARE! You get what I'm talking about.
"One of who?" Her nearest advisor questioned?
"Like that boy, Jace...or Vraska." Isperia closed her eyes, remembering Jace as the first time he strolled casually through the giant archway of the Azorious guild. "He's got the same aura...but this other foe's aura...is deadly. Jace's is....mysterious...but not dangerous..."
"Should I contact anyone?" the advisor inquired.
"Yes...Aurelia and her Boros goons might be a cute distraction while I recuperate...let them know post haste."\
Aurelia unfolded her wings, standing atop the spire of the Boros league. She looked at the destruction of the city. Her ears quivered, listening to the sounds of screams and crashes. Her city was falling apart, and at the center of the bleak maelstrom, a giant dragon.
She turned, registering her name being called. "What is it, Gideon?"
"I know you want to go fight him, but you'll die if you attempt it. Let me go. Not only am I a planeswalker too, but I've been trained in the way of Boros."
Aurelia sighed. "I know you've been trained as one of us, Gideon, but you're not powerful enough to beat this foe."
Gideon held his ground, his eyes steeled with determination. "I came to you, told you about the abominations in Zendikar, and asked for the power to defeat them. I don't know what's going on there, but I've spent months here preparing for the monstrosities of lore. I have become strong enough to seal them back into their tombs without the help of more planeswalkers, and I've even seen one of his disciples on my plane. I know I'm strong enough to fight this enemy."
Aurelia looked at him. His boros signet glimmered in the setting orange afternoon sun. His hair lay flat on his back. She looked at him for a long time, caught in thought. "Fine,'' she finally announced. "But, before you go, kneel.'' Gideon Obliged. Aurelia drew her sword with a resounding shing and placed it on his right shoulder, than his left, and again to his right. "Stand, General Gideon of the Boros Leauge." Gideon rose, his face unfaltered of emotion.
Some further additional information, the original concept I had for the story revolved around Nicol Bolas being the one to empower Gideon. Sort of as a personal challenge for himself. It still revolved around the same process, killing Chandra and consuming Urborg, except Bolas' motives were especially fixed against Urborg/Yawgmoth. Being a powerful evil entity, he don't really look up to anyone except himself, so his thoughts about Yawgmoth would be, "pssh, eef Yawgmoth, Mhrahaaa~". There was some malicious premeditation behind it. At the climax, Nicol Bolas doesn't know his own power, and gets in over his head. Gideon turns out to be more than bargained for and Nicol Bolas is stung by the bitter sweet taste of defeat and retreat. It's the essence of overconfidence that leads to regret.
It was the depth and diversity Xolotl added to the story that made it impossible for me to look back.
It would be awesome if I won, or if you guys actually wrote up some serious story details.
It would be awesome if you were disqualified, because of the word limit.
Gideon, Retired -
Planeswalker - Gideon
[+1]: You gain 1 life.
"Nicol Bolas? Sounds familiar, give me a moment... Nicol Bolas, Nicol ... Ohh~ the dragon guy right? What? Fight him? When his power is like over 9000? Nah, I am not sucidal, why bother? Huh? No. No. No. I did not 'run away'. Just to clarify, it is called a 'tactical retreat'. Now if you would excuse me, I believe the ladies, the pool and the cocktails are calling."
re word limit = means i'll only read the first 500 words when grading
will later go back and read the entire thing (because i'm interested and that was the whole point) - but it won't count toward your grade; and if your whole story isn't included in the first 500.. means your grade will suffer because the story won't be told
of course, since there's only like 1 serious submission... kinda hard not win
btw: closes and grades in approximately 21-22 hours
Daytime_Lantern submitted a worthy entry.
Although, I think stretching out to that extra colorless mana in the mana cost was an inexperienced move.
My entry was more than 50% seroius. Miostly I just wanted to underail the thread by whipping out somthing quick but I did mean it as a legitmate entry.
notes = I was really excited to see new Gideon Jura planeswalker designs; am admittedly kinda bummed so few people were interested in the same -- note that the criteria specifies a planeswalker card; creatures, etc don't meet criteria
Mown = Gideon's Tomb = functions as a "Destroy target Gideon Jura " by function of the planeswalker uniqueness rule; and black is certainly the color that would go into -- is interesting; but is crazy narrow -- add a and kill any planeswalker with Dreadbore
Lobster667 = Gideon, Survivor = repeating the middle ability (which, granted, was always more black than white) is fairly anticlimactic -- flavor concept that he's been blackened by the fight, corrupted, and barely himself is nice -- the +1 is fairly boring, though
Cisnero = Gideon, the Enslaved = it's actually a really nifty idea -- a planeswalker who's sole purpose is to help other planeswalkers -- and flavor of being overtaken completely by bolas is solid -- my only real issue is the ultimate; that's really really strong; throw 12 loyalty counters onto any planeswalker.. and then activate their ultimate that same turn (could even be you only just played them) and they still survive with a big excess of loyalty to protect themselves -- it is narrowed, in that he only combos with other planeswalkers.. but all 3 of his abilities combo with any planeswalker SO well, that I think it's a bit too strong
TPmanW = Dragonslayer Coalition = it's only 234 words; so you're good on that front -- I don't like the idea of a planeswalker with multiple sub-types in the slightest; I think it's a very bad idea and hope they never do it -- the +2 is just plain Ajani's Lightning Helix ability; and since Ajani isn't even in your list of subtypes.. -- thanks for going with a story (although it's more Tezzert takes on the dragon than Gideon), but the card design just isn't viable
theScion = Gideon, Stained with Cowardice = I like the effort; but that design is just red -- the only thing kinda white is the last ability's similarities to the original Gideon's ultimate -- double damage is red; power buff and inability to block is red (and a little black); and a 9/1 trampler for a turn is crazy red -- you didn't get any white in there.. also, how is red cowardly? red is brash and over-confident
GM_Champion = Gideon Descended = interesting that he's largely bolas colors, just switching W for U.. -- starting loyalty 4 for a potentially free (as in no mana) PW is interesting.. and I'd call the trade off of losing legendary cards rough if they didn't also ensure your guy is actually entering as a minimum 6 starting loyalty (and potentially a lot more if you're playing a mono white deck (which this guy totally can)) -- the wording on the last ability is confusing.. the "another" is there so that he can't kill himself? if you choose planeswalker, you can just remove 1 loyalty and kill a Bolas with no cost to yourself? -- I really appreciate the enthusiasm, but I don't think this design was planned out well enough
felisdomesticus = Gideon the Mindslave = pretty strong; but I'd call it ultimately fair -- but it's not Gideon in any way; it's just a red-less Bolas minion -- need at least some connection to Gideon himself -- I like the mechanics design; just don't like the submission for this context
Fenix = Gideon, He Who Lost His Spark = disqualified; not a planeswalker card; and rules break
onedayweek = Gideon, Savior = the +2 is a more controllable version of his first +2; the -3 is fairly purely red.. but the limitation that you can only steal a tapped creature would be very frustrating (even with the combo of the first ability; you want to force something to attack him so you can kill it with blockers; but you can't kill it if you want to steal it, which means you'll have to let it through and kill your Gideon) -- that's an obscenely powerful ultimate; and it doesn't feel particularly white, red, or white/red
DaytimeLantern = Gideon, Tempered = that is pretty super strong; the +1 is Sorin Markov 's +2, but you also get a card out of it -- the second ability is Dominus of Fealty on a stick -- and the ultimate's emblem is such a total "my creatures rock now" that -6, when you start with 4, and getting more is massive upside.. -- I'm not comfortable with this power level -- even with the three colors, it's still cmc 4; and that's amazingly strong -- your story is very good, but does of course break with he contest criteria
an_endless_epidemic = Gideon, Boros General = the +2 runs the risk of you not controlling 2 creatures; if it were "up to" you could get loyalty without the risk.. but it is such a strong ability, not sure if you did it on purpose to try to balance -- the ultimate is too reminiscent of Ajani Vengeant ; I really don't think wee need another w/r planeswalker that removes all of an opponent's lands -- nice story
In that case Cisnero should win unless the 1st 500 words of GM's story are sufficient to nb him the prize.
I vote Cisnero because obviously GM went all out on story to cover up the card design. (obviously didn't look at either design)
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