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I have a feeling I may end up regretting this, but...

Love's End
Instant

Destroy target creature.
Haunt (When this spell card is put into a graveyard after resolving, exile it haunting target creature.)
Haunted creature gets -2/-1.


No flavor text as it likely wouldn't fit on a card.

Sure, no problem.  

"Destroy target creature" is the flavorfully-sketchiest line on the card; unfortunately, Magic is a game based around violence and little time or space has been devoted to mechanically indicating strong emotional attachment.  AVR did introduce Soulbond, but a card that just unpairs two paired creatures is unbearably narrow.  Instead, I took the slightly more extreme route of having the silent central character of the card suffer not a relationship ending but the death of his/her beloved.  This is not strictly forbidden by the poem's text, as far as I could tell.

"Haunt" reflects the lingering memories of that creature's loss.  For ages I've been rather disappointed that Haunt was predominantly used for ghosts haunting creatures, and mostly had abilities that triggered on the haunted creature dying.  Why not expand this to a static effect showing the ongoing burden of memory?

The last time is a shout-out to Weakness ; the creature is weakened mentally and physically by his/her mental and emotional turmoil.  I chose an Aura as it specifically affects a particular creature (the enchanted one); a discard effect, as is traditional for mental issues, does not fit terribly well; it is the creature in pain, not its controller.

This this has turned out for the worst, I'll just grade the only submission and close the contest.

It would seem as though maybe you're working along a more secretive lines than you come off Glasir. The context of "Destroy target creature." reminds me of Evil Dead 2, in which the professor's wife Henrietta is possessed by a Candarian Demon and he kills her, then records the legendary record  that is played back by Ash & friends later. It could also be along the lines of "the Tell Tale Heart", in which the man kills and buries a man under the floor boards, and is later haunted by the misdeed to the point of madness. 

If this wasn't your intention, you shouldn't have used the "destroy" operation. There are lots of other options available (like bounce, shuffle, phasing, or "When this creature dies"). Take those sketchy elements seriously. Whenever something appears sketchy about your design, change it until everything is in Zen. Now, this isn't a  statement of solidarity because sometimes it just takes time to get around to it. If you've ever read my design notes and highlights, I may not change a sketchy element until the wheel comes around not once, but two times.  It's not like you wouldn't have gotten around to it, but I've learned it's best to change them right away; unless you're just out of fresh ideas, at that point it's best to move on and come back to it later.

Just something to keep in mind. We have the luxury of editing our custom projects without time-restrictions. We have an unlimited amount of time to perfect our developments. But in an actual office environment, you'll have the liability of time playing against you. It's good to pick up this protocol ahead of time, perfect those sketchy elements right away. It's a skill that you'd need to master if you are to ever get into a serious development project. Everyone here isn't just making custom Magic cards, this is real product development experience, developing a product that would go onto market for consumers and profit. It's a talent that you can apply elsewhere in your life.

Nov 27, 2012 -- 2:08PM, turnip_song wrote:

I don't really understand what's confusing about "a creature dies, then another is sad", or what in the card implies responsibility on the part of the haunted creature. Those comments are bizarre.

@GM: I think this summarizes my response your comments rather nicely, aside from noting that in most contests I throw out a quick design and come back later to edit it with fresh eyes; there wasn't time for me to do so with this contest as it ended so abruptly.

Also, I do work on serious/real-world product development, thank you very much.  I enjoy not needing to be as strict on myself with my leisure activities.