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8 months ago ::
Oct 07, 2012 - 2:03PM
#31
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Priest-Blessed Blade  Aura-Enchant Equipment Equipped character gains +0/+1 if white Equipped character gains +2/+2 vs black creatures if white. Equipped character gains -1/-1 if not white.
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8 months ago ::
Oct 07, 2012 - 3:44PM
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Reader, might I suggest you check out the Wording Clinic? There are a fair numbert of wording problems with your card.
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8 months ago ::
Oct 08, 2012 - 6:20AM
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Reader, might I suggest you check out the Wording Clinic? There are a fair numbert of wording problems with your card.
Could you spell them out for me? I don't think I can handle reading 222 pages of clues.
Thank you for helping, though!
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8 months ago ::
Oct 08, 2012 - 6:46AM
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The wording clinic is a request - response thread. You post a card, someone rips it apart and sews it into something that works.
For some things I can point out:
Your card is unclear on what it actually is. Equipments and Auras are two separate subtypes of Artifacts and Enchantments, respectively. Aura - Enchant Equipment is non-sensible. The most logical translation is:
Echantment - Aura
Enchant equipment
However, all of your abilities relates to a certain creature, and I'm not sure if the intent of the card is to be attached and effect a creature, or if you want it to attach to an equipment, and the creature equipped by that equipment is buffed by the enchantment.
There's some terminology problems, the biggest of them is "Character", which I can assume is "Creature".
"Versus" has no clear definition in the rules as to what it represents. I would assume combat, but creatures can have conflicts related to abilities and other cards, such as the Fight mechanic. Trying to include all of these will ultimately result in something terrible. If I had to guess, the card you were going for is:
Priest-Blessed Blade
Enchantment - Aura
Enchant creature
If enchanted creature is white, it gets +0/+1. Otherwise, it gets -1/-1.
Whenever enchanted creature blocks or becomes blocked by one or more black creatures, enchanted creature gets +2/+2 until end of turn if it's white.
However, that doesn't actually fit the criteria. If it's supposed to do that, then it's some wonky thing like:
Priest-Blessed Blade
Enchantment - Aura
Enchant equipment
Creatures equipped by enchanted equipment gets +0/+1 if it's white. Otherwise, it gets -1/-1.
Whenever a creature equipped by enchanted equipment blocks or becomes blocked by one or more black creatures, if equipped creature is white, it gets +2/+2 until end of turn.
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8 months ago ::
Oct 08, 2012 - 6:58AM
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I see.
I thought "Versus" was simply shorthand for "blocks and is blocked by". As for the issue about types, I thought the whole purpose of this thread was to represent auras that attached to equipment and altered the equipment's properties.
The flavor idea I was going for was a priest blessing a hero's sword like they did in the Middle Ages, dedicating it to Christ and granting it special power against the darkness. The aura represents the blessing, but the equipment to which it is attached represents the weapon being blessed.
Does that help you understand?
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