Gideon Jura 
- I don't think anyone is going to disagree with this
Shock 
- if you want to go red, I think Minotaurs is better but you may well not be wanting to follow double white with double red. Remember, you have now passed Blood Ogre and Minotaur so you are giving a clear signal to the people next to you that you are not in red. This will hurt you in pack 2.
Mana Leak 
- I agree there are a lack of good white or red cards in this pack so I can see why you took this but you now have 3 different colour cards from the first three picks.
Chandra's Outrage 
- white outrage is good removal, Lawkeeper is an excellent card and should be considered similar to removal himself. Its a tough call between them but I personally prefer the Keeper as each turn it deals with their best creature (until it dies of course).
Shock - I think Shock is the safe pick here although you need to consider that you don't have any creatures yet. Both Warhorse (for white) and Fleetwing (for blue) could be considered here.
Manic Vandal 
- this, I think, is your first major error. Griffin is a fine creature, its in the colour with your best card and the only thing stopping you going
is Mana Leak, which really isn't all that amazing. I definitely would have taken the Griffin here even with what had gone before.
Goblin Fireslinger 
- again the Griffin is just better. You are not going to be bloodthirst, you have passed two of the best red bloodthirst cards and you aren't going to be in black.
Tectonic Rift 
- you will never play this card. There are 3 reasonable white cards in this pack and I don't understand why you are avoiding white.
Tormented Soul 
Blood Seeker 
Unsummon 
- see how late Manic Vandal goes?
Fog 
- both of the other cards here are better than the Fog.
Sacred Wolf 
Runeclaw Bear 
Plains 
So by the end of pack 1 you are solidly in Red. You have a bomb in white, 2 okay black, green and blue cards.
Round 2:
Phantasmal Dragon 
- At this stage, see my comment above, you really have to decide on your second colour. There is nothing pushing you into blue at the moment from the previous round but you take a double blue card here and cement yourself in
.
Incinerate 
- If you had gone white, O-Ring is better but otherwise this is fine.
Tectonic Rift - This really is a terrible card - take the Cutthroat if you are determined to be
Fiery Hellhound 
Fiery Hellhound - Merefolk Looter is a much better card than the Hellhound. It allows you to get rid of extra land and dig for the card you need.
Skywinder Drake 
Onyx Mage 
Goblin Tunneler 
Grand Abolisher 
Fling 
Levitation 
Manabarbs 
Flight 
Ponder 
- this should never go this late and is a great pick up for you.
Swamp 
Round 3:
Fireball 
- I think this is better than the Dragon and was a good call.
Serra Angel 
- Why take a double white card when you have completely abandoned white? P3p2 is definitely too late to switch back.
Incinerate - Belltower Sphinx is possibly as good as Incinerate anyway and in your deck you already have lots of removal but are in desparate need of creatures.
Goblin Fireslinger Blood Ogre 
Cancel 
- I think Lightning Elemental here. Its not the best card by a long way but it is a creature.
Skywinder Drake Goblin Arsonist 
- Cutthroat is the better pick here. You have a lot of removal, you are not bloodthirst and a 4 toughness body is really going to help.
Act of Treason 
- I think Hellhound here just for more creatures. Yes, it is cute you have the Treason, Fling combo but you need both cards to pull it off and the Hellhound is just more consistent here.
Turn to Frog 
- Merefolk again is better here as you need creatures and already have a ton of removal.
Hideous Visage 
Turn to Frog Goblin War Paint 
Reclaim 
Mountain 
Just my thoughts.
